My Daddy!

2011-02-22 · 첨삭 강사 Christine

학생이 쓴 원문

Chris~^^ It is another good day!Every morning, I thank for God for giving me this beautiful day even though I am too sleepy every morning. My daddy is on the winter vacation thesedays, he wake me up every morning. My daddy is very deligent so he usually go clmbing small mountain near my house. There are also very big and well known mountain near my house so many poeple are visiting the mountain continuously especially in spring and fall. I've climbed that mountain one time, and it took about 4 hours to get the peak of the mountain. It is very hard to go there because there are lots of rocks on the way to the top of the mountain.I really respect my daddy because he doesn't give up even it falls snow outside. It's somewhat dangerous but he has good tools to go climbing.I hope he'll be safe!

강사 첨삭

Hi there beautiful and fantastic [이름]! ~(>_<)~ It's a very sunny Tuesday here in the Philippines and we're actually celebrating our flower festival this month!!  Wish you were here~! kkkkk Your dad is really an amazing person! You're very lucky to have him as your father. [이름]be you could also write a composition for each of your family members so I could also get to know them better. ^^ Have a great day ahead!! See you later!! ~~ ~T.Chris~ My Daddy! >>Correct. Chris~^^ It is another good day! >>Hi Chris! It’s another good day! Every morning, I thank for God for giving me this beautiful day even though I am too sleepy every morning. >> Every morning, I thank God for giving me a beautiful day even if I feel sleepy. >> I always thank God for giving me a beautiful day everyday, though I feel very sleepy in the mornings. My daddy is on the winter vacation thesedays, he wake me up every morning. >> My daddy is on his winter vacation these days so, he usually wakes up early in the morning. My daddy is very deligent so he usually go clmbing small mountain near my house. >> He is very diligent and he usually climbs a small mountain near our house. There are also very big and well known mountain near my house so many poeple are visiting the mountain continuously especially in spring and fall. >> There are also huge and famous mountains nearby, so there are always a lot of people visiting the mountain especially during spring and fall. I've climbed that mountain one time, and it took about 4 hours to get the peak of the mountain. >> I already climbed the mountain and it took me 4 hours to reach the top of it. It is very hard to go there because there are lots of rocks on the way to the top of the mountain. >> Correct. I really respect my daddy because he doesn't give up even it falls snow outside. >> I really admire my daddy because he doesn’t give up even if there is heavy snowfall outside.  It's somewhat dangerous but he has good tools to go climbing.I hope he'll be safe! >> It’s somewhat dangerous but he has safety equipments and tools for climbing. I hope he’ll be safe.  

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