My daily dose of happiness

2018-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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I am going to tell you what makes me happy in my daily routine here. First, I enjoy watching a drama. After work, I turn on my laptop and play videos of Modern Family, American drama. The best thing is the night before my days off I bring food to my room and have it watching Modern Family. I love this drama because it has well-organized plots with twists and funny, silly but unlikable characters, and they are mixed well together, which makes me laugh, smile and touched. Second, the other is reading books. Since I graduated my college, I didn't keep books close to my self really. One day I realized my knowledge I learned from schools was fading away and got too accustomed to the settled lifestyle, same things all around but no more new things in. Therefore, I recently started to read a book even for a short time on my way to work to get knowledge and latest issues and broaden my sight to the world. In this way, I feel I will improve by reading books and it makes me happy.

강사 첨삭

This is superb, [이름]!

Learning is indeed a never ending process, and reading is one of the ways to help us broaden our knowledge. Our brain can contain vast amount of knowledge so let\'s feed our brain by reading good books and being an active person. You were great! Keep on writing!

~Teacher Eunice


I am going to tell you what makes me happy in my daily routine here.

>>> Correct!
 First, I enjoy watching a drama.

>>> Correct!
 After work, I turn on my laptop and play videos of Modern Family, American drama.

>>> After work, I turn on my laptop and play the videos of the Modern Family and American dramas. 
 The best thing is the night before my days off I bring food to my room and have it watching Modern Family.

>>> The best thing is the night before my day off because I always bring food in my room and have it while watching the Modern Family.
 I love this drama because it has well-organized plots with twists and funny, silly but unlikable characters, and they are mixed well together, which makes me laugh, smile and touched.

>>> I love this drama because it has well-organized plots with twists, and a funny, silly but unlikable characters, who are all well together, which makes me laugh, smile and touched.
 Second, the other is reading books.

>>> Secondly, the other one is reading books.

>>> OR: Another thing that makes me happy is reading books.
 Since I graduated my college, I didn\'t keep books close to my self really.

>>> Since I graduated from college, I didn\'t really keep books close to myself.
 One day I realized my knowledge I learned from schools was fading away and got too accustomed to the settled lifestyle, same things all around but no more new things in.

>>> One day I have realized that the knowledge I learned from schools was fading away and got too accustomed to a settled lifestyle, the same things all around but no more new things coming in. 
 Therefore, I recently started to read a book even for a short time on my way to work to get knowledge and latest issues and broaden my sight to the world.

>>> Correct!
 In this way, I feel I will improve by reading books and it makes me happy.

>>> In this way, I can improve myself by reading books and it makes me happy as well. 


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