My daily schedule

2010-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, I worked like a dog under the exploding sun, because an annual party in honor of the aged was held by duty place where I work. Not only I carried tablewares, foods, refreshments...and so on, also I ushered esteemed elders to a seat. Really, I was all of a sweat as I get wet with rain. I was very tired, annoyed, and dying of the heat. But my heart was full and worthwhile because of the reason why lonly esteemed elders were very pleased.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!...I know how you feel because I also work as a nurse and, i experienced taking good care of elders. It’s all worth the effort.:)Good job! More blessings for you to what you have done today!:)See you tomorrow!

Today, I worked like a dog under the exploding sun, because an annual party in honor of the aged was held by duty place where I work.
>>> Today, I worked like a dog under the exploding sun, because an annual party in honor of the aged was held to the place where I work.

Not only I carried tablewares, foods, refreshments...and so on, also

I ushered esteemed elders to a seat.

>>> Not only I carried table wares, foods, refreshments...and so on, also

I ushered esteemed elders to their seat.

Really, I was all of a sweat as I get wet with rain.

>>> Really, I was all of a sweat as if I got wet in rain.

I was very tired, annoyed, and dying of the heat.

>>>correct!!!

But my heart was full and worthwhile because of the reason why lonly esteemed elders were very pleased.

> >>But my heart was full and worthwhile because of the reason that lonely esteemed elders were very pleased.

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