MY DEAR SOPHIA

2017-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

학생이 쓴 원문

My dear Sophia, I am very glad to know you and talk about our dreams, thoughts and daily lives. Given my age, taking a lesson and practicing English every other day could be a tough challenge to me. As I mentioned before, I want to prepare something for my meaningful future. I am not sure when the opportunity for me to use English, but I am sure it will certainly arrive in my life. It seemed to me that you sound very calm, cool and supportive. Your speaking speed seemed much more refined to me. I think that in a certain sense, it would be better off improving my English conversation skill. Suddenly, I began to look forward to our next lesson. Expectation is the root of all disappointment. I really desire to have a habit to speak English without any reference during our lesson. As we talked about our lesson today, on this coming Wednesday, I want to have free talking time with an article of Wednesday's senior newspaper. And next time, if you have any idea regarding our textbook, I will follow your suggestion. Thank you anyway, see you on Wednesday, Sophia!

강사 첨삭

HELLO MR. [이름],
Thank you for sharing your opinion with me.
I will try my best to meet your expectation but as what you have said, expectation leads to disappointment.
I will try my best but please don\'t expect too much from me. 
Anyway, I am looking forward to having an interesting class with you.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
My dear Sophia,
>> 
I am very glad to know you and talk about our dreams, thoughts and daily lives.
>> I am very glad to know you and to talk about our dreams, thoughts and activities in our daily lives.
Given my age, taking a lesson and practicing English every other day could be a tough challenge to me.
>> Given my age, taking a lesson and practicing how to speak in English every other day could be a tough challenge for me.
As I mentioned before, I want to prepare something for my meaningful future.
>> CORRECT
I am not sure when the opportunity for me to use English, but I am sure it will certainly arrive in my life.
>> I am not sure when will the opportunity knock on me to speak English, but I am pretty sure that it is certainly coming.
It seemed to me that you sound very calm, cool and supportive.
>> It seems that you sound very calm, cool and supportive.
Your speaking speed seemed much more refined to me.
>> CORRECT
I think that in a certain sense, it would be better off improving my English conversation skill.
>> I think that in a certain sense, it would be better off in improving my communication skill in English.
Suddenly, I began to look forward to our next lesson.
>> CORRECT
Expectation is the root of all disappointment.
>> Expectation is the root of all disappointments.
I really desire to have a habit to speak English without any reference during our lesson.
>> I really desire to be fluent in speaking in English in our class without any references.
As we talked about our lesson today, on this coming Wednesday, I want to have free talking time with an article of Wednesday\'s senior newspaper. 
>> I want to have a free talking class with you after discussing the newspaper article on Wednesday.
And next time, if you have any idea regarding our textbook, I will follow your suggestion.
>> On the other hand, you can recommend a book for us to have in the class.
Thank you anyway, see you on Wednesday, Sophia!
>> Thank you so much and see you on Wednesday Sophia.

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