My decision about job opportunity abroad
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It is very difficult to answer this question.
>> CORRECTBecause I wanted to get a job living with my family.
>> The reason is that I wanted to get a job while living with my family.I was very anxious condition when I prepared the exam to be a government officer.
>> I was very anxious when I prepared for the exam to be a government officer.
So I applied to work in my hometown, now I work in local government where I was born and raised.
>> So I applied to work in my hometown, and now I work at a local government where I was born and raised.
Actually I asked to my grandmother and mother that question.
>> Actually, I asked this question to my grandmother and mother.
They said \\\"Sure, why not?\\\".
>> They answered, “Sure, why not?”I guess they think that it is more important to step up in my career than leave with family.
>> I guess they think that it is more important to step up in my career.Maybe my family(including my father) assure that I can come back home whenever I want.
>> Maybe my family, including my father, assured me that I can come back home whenever I want.
But I\\\'m so scary to live abroad for an indefinite period of time, separated from my family.
>> But I’m so scared to live abroad for an indefinite period of time, separated from my family.Therefore, if i were offered an excellent job opportunity abroad, I will contemplate my decision with my family.
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