My decision about job opportunity abroad

2024-03-19 · 첨삭 강사 Khai

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It is very difficult to answer this question. Because I wanted to get a job living with my family. I was very anxious condition when I prepared the exam to be a government officer. So I applied to work in my hometown, now I work in local government where I was born and raised. Actually I asked to my grandmother and mother that question. They said \\\"Sure, why not?\\\". I guess they think that it is more important to step up in my career than leave with family. Maybe my family(including my father) assure that I can come back home whenever I want. But I\\\'m so scary to live abroad for an indefinite period of time, separated from my family. Therefore, if i were offered an excellent job opportunity abroad, I will contemplate my decision with my family.

강사 첨삭

Well done, [이름]! ^^ Your answer shows that you value your family very much! ^^ It is very important to contemplate difficult decisions with our families. 
-Khai

It is very difficult to answer this question.

>> CORRECT

Because I wanted to get a job living with my family. 

>> The reason is that I wanted to get a job while living with my family.

I was very anxious condition when I prepared the exam to be a government officer.

>> I was very anxious when I prepared for the exam to be a government officer.

So I applied to work in my hometown, now I work in local government where I was born and raised.

>> So I applied to work in my hometown, and now I work at a local government where I was born and raised.

Actually I asked to my grandmother and mother that question.

>> Actually, I asked this question to my grandmother and mother.

They said \\\"Sure, why not?\\\".

>> They answered, “Sure, why not?”

I guess they think that it is more important to step up in my career than leave with family.

>> I guess they think that it is more important to step up in my career.

Maybe my family(including my father) assure that I can come back home whenever I want.

>> Maybe my family, including my father, assured me that I can come back home whenever I want.

But I\\\'m so scary to live abroad for an indefinite period of time, separated from my family.

>> But I’m so scared to live abroad for an indefinite period of time, separated from my family.

Therefore, if i were offered an excellent job opportunity abroad, I will contemplate my decision with my family.

>> Therefore, if I am offered an excellent job opportunity abroad, I will contemplate my decision with my family.

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