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2016-08-24 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good evening~ Today, It was really hot day,I sweat like a pig According to the weather report the heat will be weaker But they missed 3time, now i can't belive them In the school we have to do short time class Because it's too hard to study Of course we turn on the air conditional But stil it's very hot Today is the special day because it's“Cheoseo” It's mean one of the 24 seasonal divisions occurring about the end of August (It's mean that autumn is coming!!) I am so nervous also i am little exciting I don't have to fight with heat anymore I like spring and autumn In spring the wind tickle my nose the flower grow up It is also mean we have to ready for new year In autumn i feel really lonely But i like the cool wind which blow up my loneness I am ready for autumn however after autumn i have to face with winter Well maybe i can get use to it I will stop my diary here~

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! Yes, you are right! You must be really excited for the autumn. I am happy and I am more than excited for you. Anyway, I am looking forward to seeing you in our class. Enjoy the rest of your day. ~Teacher Chloe Good evening~ >>Good evening! Today, It was really hot day,I sweat like a pig >>Today was really hot. I sweated like a pig. According to the weather report the heat will be weaker >>According to the weather report, the temperature will go down. But they missed 3time, now i can\'t belive them>>They reported it thrice but the weather is still the same. Now, I don\'t believe them. In the school we have to do short time class Because it\'s too hard to study >>In school, we had to do short time classes because it was too hard to study. Of course we turn on the air conditional >>Of course, we turned on the air conditioner. But stil it\'s very hot >>But, it was still very hot. Today is the special day because it\'s“Cheoseo”>>Today is a special day because it\'s \"Cheoseo\". It\'s mean one of the 24 seasonal divisions occurring about the end of August >>It means that that it is the 14th of the year\'s 24 solar terms and the traditional end to the summer heat. (It\'s mean that autumn is coming!!) >>It also means that the autumn or fall is coming. I am so nervous also i am little exciting >>I am nervous and a little excited about it. I don\'t have to fight with heat anymore >>I don\'t have to fight with the heat anymore. I like spring and autumn >>I like spring and autumn. In spring the wind tickle my nose the flower grow up >>In spring, the wind tickles my nose and the flowers bloom.It is also mean we have to ready for new year >>It also means that we have to ready for the New Year. In autumn i feel really lonely >>In autumn, I feel really lonely. But i like the cool wind which blow up my loneness>>But, I like the cool wind which blows up my loneliness. I am ready for autumn however after autumn i have to face with winter>>I am ready for the autumn. However, after it, I have to face the winter. Well maybe i can get use to it >>Well, maybe, I will get used to it. I will stop my diary here~ >>I will stop my diary from here.

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