My dream~

If I will be 24 years old, I will go trip with my friends~ I will go shopping with my friends, too!! I will take care of puppy!!! or cat!!!! I will earn my money a lot!!! And I will buy a good apartment~ and I will be slim~~~ It's my hope! I want to be an adult! It's my dreeam~

Happy Monday!

Thank you for sharing your dream to me. All of us have different dreams and yours are great! 

But do not rush to be an adult. Enjoy whatever you have now and that includes your skills in English.

Keep on studying and we will see each other again in our class. 

Take care!^^

~~T. Heidi~~

If I will be 24 years old, I will go trip with my friends~
>>If I become 24 years old, I will go on a trip with my friends.

or >>If I turn 24, I will go on a trip with my friends.

I will go shopping with my friends, too!!

>>I will go shopping with my friends, too!
I will take care of puppy!!! or cat!!!!

>>I will take care of a puppy or a cat.

or>>I will raise a puppy or a cat.
I will earn my money a lot!!!

>>I will earn a lot of money!
And I will buy a good apartment~ and I will be slim~~~

>> I will buy a good apartment.

I will also be slim, by then.

It\'s my hope! I want to be an adult!

>>Correct
It\'s my dreeam~

>>It\'s my dream.^^