My dream

I wanted to become a teacher when I was a kid. Because at that time,I thought that the teacher became aware of the most significant. But, As I go through adolescence, my dreams have changed. When adolescents wanted to be an architect. I am interested in interior design and wanted to demonstrate the ability.But I do not want to enroll in the Department became a major in telecommunications. I graduated from college and to prepare a one-year job was a job in Korea Electric Power Corporation through. Currently, I am satisfied with the work plans for the future is to work hard.

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Here are the corrections:

I wanted to become a teacher when I was a kid.

>> Correct.
Because at that time,I thought that the teacher became aware of the most significant.

>> Because at that time, I thought that a teacher knows what is the most significant thing.

But, As I go through adolescence, my dreams have changed.

>> Correct.
When adolescents wanted to be an architect.

>> Now that I'm an adult, I want to be an architect.
I am interested in interior design and wanted to demonstrate the ability.

>> Correct.

But I do not want to enroll in the Department became a major in telecommunications.

>> But I didn't want to enroll in that department so I took up a major in telecommunications.
I graduated from college and to prepare a one-year job was a job in Korea Electric Power Corporation through.

>> I graduated from college and had a job for a year in Korea Electric Power Corporation.
Currently, I am satisfied with the work plans for the future is to work hard.

>> Currently, I'm satisfied with my work plans for the future, so I have to work hard.