My Dream
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to be a doctor.I dreamed to be a doctor when i was younger than now.My mother said i dreamed a doctor because my meadical attendent was pretty.But now i want to care sick people and bring some good news to them.I think doctor is very cool job.Many people say being doctor is hard,i will always do my best to be a doctor.Well....my dreams can change,but until i change my dream,i will do my best to be a doctor.Thank you for reading my English composition.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
Thank you for sending this amazing composition!
I know that one day you can become a doctor if you work hard for it.
I hope you enjoy the rest of your night~
See you in class~
I want to be a doctor.
>>CORRECT
I dreamed to be a doctor when i was younger than now.
>>I dreamed about being a doctor when I was younger.
My mother said i dreamed a doctor because my meadical attendent was pretty.
>>My mother told me that I can be a doctor because my medical record was good.
But now i want to care sick people and bring some good news to them.
>>I want to take care of sick people and bring them some good news.
I think doctor is very cool job.
>> I think being a doctor is a cool job.
Many people say being doctor is hard,i will always do my best to be a doctor.
>> Many people say that being a doctor is hard.
>> I will do my best to be a doctor.
Well....my dreams can change,but until i change my dream,i will do my best to be a doctor.
>>My dreams may change but until then, I will do my best to become a doctor.
Thank you for reading my English composition.
>>CORRECT
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