My dream
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강사 첨삭
Thank you Rose!
~Teacher Lucy
Everybody asks that question.
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Actually, my dream changed about 5 times.
>>Actually, my dream changed for about 5 times.
I never really knew what I wanted to be in the future.
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Then, I did not had a dream.
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But, one day stanaranacle about a\" pet furniture designer\".
>>But, one day I encountered about a \"pet furniture designer\".
And I thought that would be my dream.
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But why? Here are 3 reasons.
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First, I like cats.
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A pet furniture designer designes pet furniture.
>>A pet furniture designer designs pet furniture.
Nowadays, many cats need pet furniture.
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So, many pet furniture designers make cat furniture I want to do something I like And, I like cats! second, I like to design.
>>So, many pet furniture designers make cat furniture and I want to do something I like - first, cats! second, I like to design.
I like drawing.
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I like to think creativily, It\'s fun to draw what I think.
>> I like to think creatively and it\'s fun to draw what I think.
I feel I can make anything!
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I like to think what I would need, what I can make!
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It makes me happy, Third, I found many problems in pet furnitures.
>>It makes me happy, third, I found many problems in pet furniture.
I watched Youtube and there was a review it\" Mejoo and \'cats\".
>>I watched YouTube and there was a review of \" Mejoo and \'cats\".
she said all the problems to Illom (furniture company) and they made a new pet furni ture.
>>She said all the problems at Illom (furniture company) and they made a new pet furniture.
thought the furnitures were all asome.
>>I thought the furniture were all awesome.
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