My dream

2020-01-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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What do you want to be when you grow up? Everybody asks that question. Actually, my dream changed about 5 times. I never really knew what I wanted to be in the future. Then, I did not had a dream. But, one day stanaranacle about a\" pet furniture designer\". And I thought that would be my dream. But why? Here are 3 reasons. First, I like cats. A pet furniture designer designes pet furniture. Nowadays, many cats need pet furniture. So, many pet furniture designers make cat furniture I want to do something I like And, I like cats! second, I like to design. I like drawing. I like to think creativily, It\'s fun to draw what I think. I feel I can make anything! I like to think what I would need, what I can make! It makes me happy, Third, I found many problems in pet furnitures. I watched Youtube and there was a review it\" Mejoo and \'cats\". she said all the problems to Illom (furniture company) and they made a new pet furni ture. Ithought the furnitures were all asome.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Rose!

~Teacher Lucy


Everybody asks that question.

>>CORRECT!

 Actually, my dream changed about 5 times.

>>Actually, my dream changed for about 5 times.

I never really knew what I wanted to be in the future.

>>CORRECT!

Then, I did not had a dream.

>>CORRECT!

But, one day stanaranacle about a\" pet furniture designer\".

>>But, one day I encountered about a \"pet furniture designer\".

And I thought that would be my dream.

>>CORRECT!

But why? Here are 3 reasons.

>>CORRECT!

First, I like cats.

>>CORRECT!

A pet furniture designer designes pet furniture.

>>A pet furniture designer designs pet furniture.

Nowadays, many cats need pet furniture.

>>CORRECT!

So, many pet furniture designers make cat furniture I want to do something I like And, I like cats! second, I like to design.

>>So, many pet furniture designers make cat furniture and I want to do something I like - first, cats! second, I like to design.

I like drawing.

>>CORRECT!

 I like to think creativily, It\'s fun to draw what I think.

>> I like to think creatively and it\'s fun to draw what I think.

 I feel I can make anything!

>>CORRECT!

 I like to think what I would need, what I can make!

>>CORRECT!

 It makes me happy, Third, I found many problems in pet furnitures.

>>It makes me happy, third, I found many problems in pet furniture.

I watched Youtube and there was a review it\" Mejoo and \'cats\".

>>I watched YouTube and there was a review of \" Mejoo and \'cats\".

she said all the problems to Illom (furniture company) and they made a new pet furni ture.

>>She said all the problems at Illom (furniture company) and they made a new pet furniture.

thought the furnitures were all asome.

>>I thought the furniture were all awesome.

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