my dream job

2011-07-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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my dream job is a millionaire. i just want a lot of money. if i become a millionaire i can do anything i want to. buy anything i want. go anywhere i want to and also i can help people as much as i can. that will be great. i don't need to do anything to earn money. i can do things that i really want to do.

강사 첨삭

Hi John,

Interesting composition! Just wondering where can I pass my application to be a millionaire. ^^

Teacher May

my dream job is a millionaire.

>> I want to be a millionaire.
i just want a lot of money.

>> I just want to have a lot of money.

if i become a millionaire i can do anything i want to.

>>If I become a millionaire I can do anything I wan to do.

buy anything i want.

>> Buy anything I want.

go anywhere i want to and also i can help people as much as i can.

>> I can go anywhere and help people as much as I can.

that will be great.

>> That will be great.
i don't need to do anything to earn money.

>>I don't need to do anything to earn money.

i can do things that i really want to do.

>> I can do things I really want to do.

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