my dream vacation is...

2017-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kathy

학생이 쓴 원문

my dream vacation is .... as I think... a part time job.. I gonna do a company work sooner or late.. it maybe hard. I wish that it shall easy.. because I hate working for money ..making money is irritating and boring.. but the result is sweet.. help me to earn a money.. thanks..

강사 첨삭

Good day!
I do appreciate you sending your answer to me. Your answers were very good but we need to correct some of your grammars and sentence structures. I do hope that you do not take these corrections as an offense but take these corrections as an opportunity for you t
o improve your English more ^_^
~~ Teacher Kathy ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
my dream vacation is .... as I think... a part time job..
>> My dream vacation is to get a part time job.
I gonna do a company work sooner or late..
>> I will be working in a company soon.
it maybe hard. I wish that it shall easy..
>> I know it will be hard but I still hope it will be easy.
because I hate working for money
>> I hate working for money.
..making money is irritating and boring.. but the result is sweet..
>> Making money is both irritating and boring but the result is sweet.
help me to earn a money..
>> Please help me earn money.
thanks..
>> Thank you.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기