My elementary school days!

2012-12-19 · 첨삭 강사 heidi

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Next year, I will be a middle school student. So, today! I think about my elementary school days!! Teachers and friends are kind to me! When I was sad or happy, they are sad or happy together. I wil miss my friends and teachers. In this grade, I fight with my brother than other days. But, Most days are enjoy to me. And then, I know that I am good at art! Oh!!! I think I have great times!! I send my best wishes to me*^^*

강사 첨삭

Hello Sarah dear! 

I am happy that you\'re sending compositions to me. 

It\'s good that you\'re thinking about your elementary school days. 

I know that you\'re going to enter a new phase of your life next year and that it\'s going to be both a happy and a sad event.

It\'s a happy event because it means that you\'ve worked hard enough to proceed to middle school.

It\'s a sad event because you\'re going to leave your teachers and your friends. 

But don\'t worry, you will meet a lot of new friends and you will also experience new things in life. 

Anyway, I\'ll see you on Friday Sarah!

I hope that you\'re going to have a great evening! 

~~T. Heidi^-^

Next year, I will be a middle school student.

>>>Correct!

>>>Or: I am going to be a middle school student next year.
So, today! I think about my elementary school days!!

>>>So today, I am thinking about my elementary school days!
Teachers and friends are kind to me!

>>>My teachers and my friends are all kind to me.
When I was sad or happy, they are sad or happy together.

>>>When I was feeling sad or happy, they would also be sad or happy. We feel the same emotion.
I wil miss my friends and teachers.

>>>I will miss my friends and my teachers.

>>>Or: I am going to miss my friends and my teachers.

In this grade, I fight with my brother than other days.

>>>This grade, I had more fights with my brother than my previous grades.

But, Most days are enjoy to me. 

>>>But I enjoy myself most of the days.
And then, I know that I am good at art!

>>>And then I found out that I am good in arts!
Oh!!! I think I have great times!!

>>>Correct!
I send my best wishes to me*^^*

>>>I am wishing for the best!

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