my family is......

Hi [이름]!

You have used  lot of descriptive words in this composition.

You created a picture in my mind.

It\'s very easy for me to imagine how each member of your family behaves.

You have a gift in writing.

I hope you continue to work hard and improve.

~~ Teacher Sharon

If I and my sister do something wrong, my mother becomes a very scary mother.

>> If my sister and I do something wrong, my mother becomes a very scary mother.
but nest day my mother looks very kind and happy.

>> However, the next day, my mother would look very kind and happy.
So I think the person with this unusual charm is the most attractive one.

>> I think a person with this unusual charm is the most attractive one.
Also, my younger sister is as attractive as my mother, but she is very excited and interesting.

>> My younger sister is also as attractive as my mother, but she is very exciting and interesting.
My sister make me fun when I\'m scolded by my mother and I\'m depressed.

>> My sister makes me laugh when I\'m scolded by my mother and I\'m depressed.
That gives me strength.

>> She gives me strength. 
Finally, Dad!

>> Finally, let\'s talk about my dad.
My dad is a real bodyguard who protects my family.

>> Correct
He is always straight and funny...

>> He is a funny person.
I\'ll be sorry if we\'re done here.

>> I don\'t want to end this yet.
can\'t miss it.

>> I can\'t help it.

I am in charge of my family\'s humor.

>> Correct
And the appearance is good.
>> Each of us has a good appearance.
In other words, our family is all charming!

>> In other words, all the members of my family are all charming!