My family\'s vacation
학생이 쓴 원문
I spent my vacation in Thailand with my family in January of last year.
we went there to play golf.
Maybe I think it\'s the first visiting of abroad together of all my family.
My daughter was always busy because she was golf player for golf games.
She is teaching glof now.
강사 첨삭
Good morning Ms. [Name]! Reading on your homework is thrilling for me. I love taking about traveling with families. Express yourself more in writing :) Thank you!
~Aki:)
I spent my vacation in Thailand with my family in January of last year.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> In January 2020, My family and I spent our vacation in Thailand.
We went there to play golf.
We went there to play golf.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> We went there for golfing.
Maybe I think it\'s the first visiting of abroad together of all my family.>>> I think, it\'s the first overseas trip of my family.
My daughter was always busy because she was golf player for golf games.
My daughter was always busy because she was golf player for golf games.
>>> My daughter was always busy because she was a golf player for international games.
She is teaching glof now.
She is teaching glof now.
>>> She is teaching golf now,
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