my father's birthday~~!!

2010-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 lei

학생이 쓴 원문

Yesterday, it was my father's birthday. Frankly speaking, he is a wet blanket and he has not a romantic mood. of course I love him but my family except for my father are anoyed because of his chracter. It was the same yesterday. My mother, brother, brotehr's wife and I planned a birthday party for my father and we gathered our home for having a dinner. But he threw a wet blanket. He said that he had a dinner already so he didn't want to go out. Oh my~~ Although I was anoyed I constantly persuaded him. Finally, I was able to see the fruit of my efforts. We went out for having a dinner. We ate some beef and sliced cake and then I gave him some money. Flowers came out on his face with joy. Anyway we had a good time. ^^

강사 첨삭

Oh Hi J!!! Yeah, you mentioned that it was your father's birthday yesterday. Sometimes, I think fathers are like that. They are kill joy. And sometimes they just wanted to get some attention and they like being persuaded. ^^ But I am glad that in the end he actually appreciated your efforts. Great job on your composition by the way. Have a great day and happy weekend J!! See you on Monday!! Lei J   Yesterday, it was my father's birthday.>>correctFrankly speaking, he is a wet blanket and he has not in a romantic mood.>>correctof course I love him but my family except for my father are annoyed because of his character.>>correctIt was the same yesterday.>>correctMy mother, brother, brother's wife and I planned a birthday party for my father and we gathered in our home for dinner.>>correctBut he threw a wet blanket.>>correctHe said that he had a dinner already so he didn't want to go out.>>correctOh my~~>>correctalthough I was annoyed I constantly persuade him.>>correctFinally, I was able to see the fruit of my efforts.>>correctWe went out for having a dinner.>>we went out for dinner.We ate some beef and sliced cake and then I gave him some money.>>correctFlowers came out on his face with joy.>>correctAnyways we had a good time. ^^ >>correct

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