My favorite book

2010-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 Karen

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When I was a child, I was interested of reading books a lot. My parents bought me lots of books. I read them all. Reading books was my fun activity in my childhood. But as I grew up , I got lost the interest of reading. I read an impressive book written by Japanese doctor who is very famous for an internal medicine. It is about health. to be specific, This book gives the ways not to get a disease for the rest of our days. I am going to tell you some ways introduced in the book. Drink 500cc of water 1 hour before having a meal. Try to be a vegeterian. Don't drink milk. Eat living foods like vegetables not instant foods. I have kept these rules since 6 months ago. I think my body is getting better and better.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Wow, you're a bookworm! Your composition is very interesting too. Maybe I will also try to follow them. Keep on reading, it will be helpful for you.   When I was a child, I was interested of reading books a lot. >>correct^^ My parents bought me lots of books. >>corect^^ I read them all. >>correct^^ Reading books was my fun activity in my childhood. >>Reading books was my fun activity during my childhood.But as I grew up , I got lost the interest of reading.>>But as I grew up, I lost my interest in reading.I read an impressive book written by Japanese doctor who is very famous for an internal medicine.>>I read an impressive book written by a famous Japanese doctor for internal medicine. It is about health. to be specific, This book gives the ways not to get a disease for the rest of our days.>>It is abot health, to be specific. This book talks about ways not to get a disease for the rest of our days. I am going to tell you some ways introduced in the book.>>I'm going to tell you some of the ways introduced in the book. Drink 500cc of water 1 hour before having a meal.>>correct^^ Try to be a vegeterian.>>Try to be a vegetarian. >>(OR) Try eating more vegetables. Don't drink milk.>>Correct^^ Eat living foods like vegetables not instant foods.>>Eat healthy foods like vegetables and fruits not instant foods. I have kept these rules since 6 months ago.>>For 6 months, I followed these rules. I think my body is getting better and better. >>correct^^

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