My favorite hobby.
학생이 쓴 원문
Recently, i am bound up in mystery stories. One of its, is about a ‘ancient Giant’. Before a few days, i was watching about ‘the pyramid of Egypt’ on Youtube. After the end of the story, the next video was automatically recommenced to me. I of course clicked, and the story is ‘ the real exist Giant in ancient’ i can not skip it. Successively, i also read some books on it. In result, my hobby is knowing on mystery story.
Whenever i’m bored, i usually used to a smart phone, among especially at Youtube. At the moment, i saw a ‘recommend video on Leonardo da Vinci’. I didn’t well-known who he is. But since i start to watch the video, i interested in history of a world. I think it is a valuable opportunity. And even this is a so fun to me. Someday, when i can read well in English language then, i will read a lots of real books published without translation.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] [이름]!^^
Thank you for sharing your passion and hobby these days. Have fun watching on YouTube!😉
Always,
Kelly😍
Recently, i am bound up in mystery stories. >> Recently, I am bound up with mystery stories.
One of its, is about a ‘ancient Giant’.
>> One of them is \"Ancient Giant\".
Before a few days, i was watching about ‘the pyramid of Egypt’ on Youtube.
>> A few days ago, I watched about \"The Pyramids of Egypt\" on YouTube.
After the end of the story, the next video was automatically recommenced to me.
>> At the end of the story, the next video was automatically recommended to me.
I of course clicked, and the story is ‘ the real exist Giant in ancient’ i can not skip it.
>> Of course I clicked the next story which is entitled \"Giants Did Exist in Ancient History\" and I could not stop watching it.
Successively, i also read some books on it. In result, my hobby is knowing on mystery story.
>> Successively, I also read some books about it. As a result, I started to enjoy reading mystery stories.
Whenever i’m bored, i usually used to a smart phone, among especially at Youtube.
Whenever i’m bored, i usually used to a smart phone, among especially at Youtube.
>> I used to constantly check my smart phone, especially when watching YouTube.
At the moment, i saw a ‘recommend video on Leonardo da Vinci’.
>> While watching YouTube, I saw a recommended video about \"Leonardo da Vinci\".
I didn’t well-known who he is. But since i start to watch the video, i interested in history of a world.
>> I didn\'t know that he was a well-known person. But since I started watching the video, I became interested to World History.
I think it is a valuable opportunity.
>> Correct.
And even this is a so fun to me.
>> It is also fun to me.
Someday, when i can read well in English language then, i will read a lots of real books published without translation.
>> Someday, when I can read fluently the English language, I am going to read lots of books in English.
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