My favorite holiday

2018-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Michelle

학생이 쓴 원문

First, my favorite holiday is chjuseok because long holiday and weather is neither hot nor cold. Second, my favorite holiday is New Year's Day because can start afresh third, my favorite holiday is children's Day althoughㄷeven on children i like this day

강사 첨삭

Hello Laura! I really appreciate that you always make your homework. This way, you can also practice your English writing skill. This can also help you enhance your vocabulary. I think your favorite holidays are interesting. I would like to know more about that during our class. Please see some corrections I have made in your sentences. Thank you very much! Have a nice day!


First, my favorite holiday is chjuseok because long holiday and weather is neither hot nor cold.
>>> My favorite holiday is, first, Chuseok because it is a long holiday and the weather is neither hot nor cold.


Second, my favorite holiday is New Year\'s Day because can start afresh

>>> My second favorite holiday is New year\'s day because I can start a fresh/new beginning.
 
third, my favorite holiday is children\'s Day althoughㄷeven on children i like this day 

>>> My third favorite holiday is Children\'s day, although I am not a child anymore, I still like this day.


_TEACHER MICHELLE_
 
 

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