My favorite movie
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My favorite movie is theatrical version of Crayon Shin chang. This is my favorite because it makes me remind the summer vacation when I was little. When the summer vacation begins I went to my grandmother’s home and stayed there for two weeks. While I was staying there, I watched Crayon Shin Chang all day long with my sister and cousins. We watched lots of different versions of that and it is one of my memorable time in my life. When I watch that movie now, I can recall my blissful memories. Besides, it makes me feel I’m five years old. Watching movies that I enjoyed in my childhood, makes me feel nostalgia.
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My favorite movie is theatrical version of Crayon Shin chang.
>> My favorite movie is the theatrical version of Crayon Shin Chang.
This is my favorite because it makes me remind the summer vacation when I was little.
>> This is my favorite because it reminds me of my summer vacations when I was little.
When the summer vacation begins I went to my grandmother’s home and stayed there for two weeks.
>> When the summer vacation begins, I\'ll always visit my grandmother’s house and stay there for two weeks.
While I was staying there, I watched Crayon Shin Chang all day long with my sister and cousins.
>> While staying there, I watch Crayon Shin Chang all day long with my sister and cousins.
We watched lots of different versions of that and it is one of my memorable time in my life.
>> Watching different versions of that movie is one of the most memorable moments in my life.
When I watch that movie now, I can recall my blissful memories. Besides, it makes me feel I’m five years old.
>> Whenever I watch that movie now, I can recall my blissful memories. Also, It makes me feel like I\'m five years old again.
Watching movies that I enjoyed in my childhood, makes me feel nostalgia.
>>Watching movies that I enjoyed in my childhood, makes me feel nostalgic.
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