My favorite season.
학생이 쓴 원문
I love fall among the four seasons. Blowing cool wind makes my mind fresh. Sometimes falling leaves make me blue. However even I love gloomy feeling. Although winter has cool wind, I don't like it as much as fall. Because wind in winter is too cold. Anyway I like winter among the seasons except fall.
Also, I think that spring is not bad. Many plants bloom in spring. Spring is warm, beautiful and hopeful. Trees have started to sprout like hope. And troubles disappear like snows melt.
On the other hand, I hate summer. I'm usually irritated in summer. Because too hot to do anything, I spend my days in a state of torpor. Besides I have hives, sensitived in heat. When I get hives, my skin tingles like pricked body on thousand needles. Moreover, insects is increasing in summer.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
You are totally different from the others. Most of the people I’ve talk
to like spring above all the four seasons. However, the reasons you
stated let my understand why you like it more. Great job-keep it up.
Here are the corrections:
Stay safe,
Connie
I love fall among the four seasons.
>> correct^^
>> Among the four seasons, I love fall the most. ->> better
Blowing cool wind makes my mind fresh.
>> Blowing cool wind makes my mind be refreshed.
Sometimes falling leaves make me blue.
>> Correct^^
However even I love gloomy feeling.
>> Correct^^
Although winter has cool wind, I don't like it as much as fall.
>> Winter has cool wind, too but I don’t like it as much as fall.
Because wind in winter is too cold.
>> The winter wind is too cold.
Anyway I like winter among the seasons except fall.
>> I also like the winter season but not that of fall. Also, I think that spring is not bad.
>> Correct^^
Many plants bloom in spring.
>> Many flowers bloom in spring.
>> Many plants grow in spring.
Spring is warm, beautiful and hopeful.
>> correct^^
Trees have started to sprout like hope.
>> correct^^
And troubles disappear like snows melt.
>> Troubles disappear like how snows melt. On the other hand, I hate summer.
>> Correct^^
I'm usually irritated in summer. Because too hot to do anything,
>> I’m usually irritated in summer, because it’s too hot and I can’t do anything..
I spend my days in a state of torpor.
>> correct^^
Besides I have hives, sensitived in heat.
>> Beside that, I have hives, it’s so sensitive from heat.
When I get hives, my skin tingles like pricked body on thousand needles.
>> When I get hives, my skin tingles like a body pricked by thousand needles.
Moreover, insects is increasing in summer.
>> Moreover, insects are increasing in summer.
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