My favorite snack

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My favorite snack is ice cream.

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I usually eat ice cream 3 or 4 during oneday.

>> I usually eat ice cream 3 or 4 times in one day.
It is so delicious and sweet.

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Actually, the most favorite ice cream is chocolate ice cream.

>> My favorite flavor of ice cream is chocolate.
It is so sweet.

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And I buy the ice cream at the Baskinrabens.

>> I buy my ice cream from Baskin-Robbins.
There are many kind of ice cream.

>> There are many flavors of ice cream.

I like it!

>> Correct