My First English Writting !
학생이 쓴 원문
Today i buy the aroma.
Do you know Aroma? Aroma is a little famous in Korea.
Aroma is like a perfume, that has a medical effect.
The aroma, i buy today, is rose.
Rosearoma is good effect of Stress, depression and envy.
...in actually, nowadays i feel a little depression...
Allmost my friends can speak very good english.
but i can't.
i know, if i do my best, i will also english very well.
but i think i am late.
>A< like this reason i envy my smart friends and feel depressio
HOWERE !! Today i buy a rosearoma! So maybe this can help me!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
June, pleaese always help me ^^
Whenever i take with you, i am so happy and joyful!
bye >A< see monday.
Have a goooooooooooooood weekend!
강사 첨삭
Hi Kongmin! ^^
Thanks for your first English composition! I wrote about aromatherapy before when I was studying in the university. I liked learning about the rose scent from you. ^^
Don't worry too much about speaking English. We will work together to improve your skills okay? Just remember that practice makes perfect so have patience.
I have one question you can help me with. What does this mean - >A<? ^^
I'm glad you enjoy class. See you in a while! ^^
~ June
Today i buy the aroma.
>> Today, I bought aroma.Do you know Aroma? Aroma is a little famous in Korea.
>> CorrectAroma is like a perfume, that has a medical effect.>> Correct
>> Aroma is like a perfume that has a medical effect. (Better ^^)
The aroma, i buy today, is rose.
>> The aroma I bought today is rose scented.Rosearoma is good effect of Stress, depression and envy.
>> The rose aroma is a good relief for stress, depression and envy.
...in actually, nowadays i feel a little depression...
>> Actually, I feel a little depressed nowadays.Allmost my friends can speak very good english. but i can't.
>> Almost all of my friends can speak very good English but I can't.i know, if i do my best, i will also english very well.>> I know that if I do my best, I will also speak English very well.
but i think i am late.
>> However, I think I am too late.>A< like this reason i envy my smart friends and feel depression
>> >A< For this reason, I envy my smart friends and I feel depressed.
HOWERE !! Today i buy a rosearoma! So maybe this can help me!>>However, today, I bought some rose aroma so maybe this can help me!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
>>CorrectJune, pleaese always help me ^^>>June, please always help me. ^^
Whenever i take with you, i am so happy and joyful!
>>Whenever I take class with you, I am so happy and joyful! bye >A< see monday.
>>Bye! >A< See you Monday.Have a goooooooooooooood weekend!
>>Correct!
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