My First English Writting !

2010-11-01 · 첨삭 강사 June

학생이 쓴 원문

Today i buy the aroma. Do you know Aroma? Aroma is a little famous in Korea. Aroma is like a perfume, that has a medical effect. The aroma, i buy today, is rose. Rosearoma is good effect of Stress, depression and envy. ...in actually, nowadays i feel a little depression... Allmost my friends can speak very good english. but i can't. i know, if i do my best, i will also english very well. but i think i am late. >A< like this reason i envy my smart friends and feel depressio HOWERE !! Today i buy a rosearoma! So maybe this can help me! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA June, pleaese always help me ^^ Whenever i take with you, i am so happy and joyful! bye >A< see monday. Have a goooooooooooooood weekend!

강사 첨삭

  Hi Kongmin! ^^ Thanks for your first English composition! I wrote about aromatherapy before when I was studying in the university. I liked learning about the rose scent from you. ^^ Don't worry too much about speaking English. We will work together to improve your skills okay? Just remember that practice makes perfect so have patience. I have one question you can help me with. What does this mean - >A<? ^^ I'm glad you enjoy class. See you in a while! ^^ ~ June Today i buy the aroma. >> Today, I bought aroma.Do you know Aroma? Aroma is a little famous in Korea. >> CorrectAroma is like a perfume, that has a medical effect.>> Correct >> Aroma is like a perfume that has a medical effect. (Better ^^) The aroma, i buy today, is rose. >> The aroma I bought today is rose scented.Rosearoma is good effect of Stress, depression and envy. >> The rose aroma is a good relief for stress, depression and envy. ...in actually, nowadays i feel a little depression... >> Actually, I feel a little depressed nowadays.Allmost my friends can speak very good english. but i can't. >> Almost all of my friends can speak very good English but I can't.i know, if i do my best, i will also english very well.>> I know that if I do my best, I will also speak English very well. but i think i am late. >> However, I think I am too late.>A< like this reason i envy my smart friends and feel depression >> >A< For this reason, I envy my smart friends and I feel depressed. HOWERE !! Today i buy a rosearoma! So maybe this can help me!>>However, today, I bought some rose aroma so maybe this can help me! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA >>CorrectJune, pleaese always help me ^^>>June, please always help me. ^^ Whenever i take with you, i am so happy and joyful! >>Whenever I take class with you, I am so happy and joyful! bye >A< see monday. >>Bye! >A< See you Monday.Have a goooooooooooooood weekend! >>Correct!    

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