my first flying experience
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I remember my first flying experience. it takes so long time. when i was a university student,i had gone to Russia (Moscow & saint-petersburg) it is very fantastic flying but so long. it takes 11 hour. At the beginning time, i surprised & worried but after some time i enjoyed good view & flying. But after few hour i was boring because of long flying time. so i slept & slept & slept Nevertheless, it was my pleasant experience.
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T.Ritchel
I remember my first flying experience.
>>Correct
it takes so long time.
>>It was a long time ago.
when i was a university student,i had gone to Russia (Moscow & saint-petersburg) it is very fantastic flying but so long.
>>When I was still university student, I went to Russia (Moscow & St. Petersburg). It is a very fantastic experience but flying time took so long.
it takes 11 hour. At the beginning time, i surprised & worried but after some time i enjoyed good view & flying.
>>It takes 11 hours. At first, I was surprised & worried but after some time I enjoyed riding and sight seeing.
But after few hour i was boring because of long flying time.
>>But after few hours I was bored because of the long flying time.
so i slept & slept & slept Nevertheless, it was my pleasant experience.
>>So I just slept. Nevertheless, it was my pleasant experience.
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