My first son's sports day
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello,
Last saturday, My first son's sports day in kindergarten. and My family went to kindergarten for sports day.
I was received gift, because I runned third. then, My first son was pleased in gift.
Sports day was finshed at 3:00 pm. My family were very tired. early time, we take evening meal and quickly s[이름]ping.
강사 첨삭
Hello Sir! Thank you for sharing your weekend activities with me. It\'s really fun to spend time with our family. I\'m so happy to know that you spend your weekend with them despite your busy schedule. Enjoy your day and I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
__Teacher Kelly__
Hello,>>Hello!Last saturday, My first son\'s sports day in kindergarten.
>> Last Saturday was my son\'s sports day in Kindergarten.
and My family went to kindergarten for sports day.
>> My family went to the Sports Festival.I was received gift, because I runned third.
>> I received a gift because I got the third place in the running competition.
then, My first son was pleased in gift. >>My son was so pleased with the gift.
Sports day was finshed at 3:00 pm.
>> The Sports day ended at 3:00pm.
My family were very tired.
>> My family was very tired.
early time, we take evening meal and quickly s[이름]ping.
>> We had an early dinner and slept early.
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