My fitness goal in this year

2024-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Khai

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First, I will take pilates class all this year. Because I want to correct my body shape. Actually I have pain at left pelvis and waist because of imbalance on my body. Also, when I have a time on July, I want to take swim class again. Because the swim is a kind of aerobic exercise, I can strengthen my body.

강사 첨삭

Your fitness goal is very impressive, [이름]! ^^ Good luck and I know you can do it! 
First, I will take pilates class all this year.

>> First, I will take a Pilates class this year.

Because I want to correct my body shape.
>> I want to correct my body shape.
Actually I have pain at left pelvis and waist because of imbalance on my body.
>> Actually, I have pain in my left pelvis and waist because of an imbalance in my body.
Also, when I have a time on July, I want to take swim class again.
>> Also, when I have time in July, I want to take swim[이름]g class again
Because the swim is a kind of aerobic exercise, I can strengthen my body.
>> Swim[이름]g is a kind of aerobic exercise that can help strengthen my body.

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