My fondest childhood memories.
학생이 쓴 원문
-What is your fondest childhood memories?
When I was young, I used to live in Gwangju where is one of the big cities in Korea. And there was an amusement park near our house. One day, I went there with my family, and one song festival was helding coincidentally. If you win, you can get some presents as a prize. So, my sister and I participated in the festival. Unfortunately, we couldn\'t win, but they gave us a very pretty watch respectively. I still get the picture which was taken by the time. The entire mood of the amusement park and nice weather, I would not get the same thing anymore.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jenna! Thank you for taking the time in doing your homework. I appreciate it a lot. I could have checked your homework yesterday but due to internet problems, I was not able to. I hope you find time to read this today. ^ ^
Thank you for sharing your fondest memory. Whilst I was reading it, I was imagining how fun it was and probably you were so excited that time! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
When I was young, I used to live in Gwangju where is one of the big cities in Korea.
>>When I was young, we used to live in Gwangju which is one of the big cities in Korea.
And there was an amusement park near our house.
>>CORRECT
One day, I went there with my family, and one song festival was helding coincidentally.
>>One day, I went there with my family, and a song festival was being held coincidentally.
If you win, you can get some presents as a prize.
>>CORRECT
So, my sister and I participated in the festival.
>>CORRECT
Unfortunately, we couldn\'t win, but they gave us a very pretty watch respectively.
>>Unfortunately, we couldn\'t win, but they gave us each a very pretty watch.
I still get the picture which was taken by the time.
>>I still have that picture with me which was taken during that time.
The entire mood of the amusement park and nice weather, I would not get the same thing anymore.
>>The entire mood of the amusement park and the nice weather, I would probably not get/experience the same thing anymore.
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