My goal for 2012

2011-12-30 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

학생이 쓴 원문

I am very unhappy with the result of 2011 I always think that I will do better and better but I am very disappointed because of the bad decision. I think the most important thing is the ability and capability of me. but the important matter is human relationship in korea. I just realized that personal ability is not the matter when someone is evaluated. I think the most important part is that which university, which family someone has. So kangnam wives they urged thier sons or daughters go to the famous university. In my case I graduated from the canadian university and Idon't have much relationship with someone who work with me. If I don't have any relathionship with my superior people. then I hace to do entertain them for my promotion. I hate to do this thing and I will achive my goal by myself. I will keep that in mind and I will be sustainable and agilant for all the things.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mr.[이름]!!!  I truly appreciate your positivity about your future. Just always keep the faith Mr.[이름]. I will always pray for your success. May you have a good start for the year 2012. Take care and talk to you soon then. Teacher Lara   I am very unhappy with the result of 2011 >> CorrectI always think that I will do better and better but I am very disappointed because of the bad decision.>> CorrectI think the most important thing is the ability and capability of me. >> Correctbut the important matter is human relationship in korea.>> But the most important matter in Korea is human relationship.I just realized that personal ability is not the matter when someone is evaluated.>> CorrectI think the most important part is that which university, which family someone has. >> CorrectSo kangnam wives they urged thier sons or daughters go to the famous university.>> So wives from Kangnam urged their sons or daughters to enter a famous university.In my case I graduated from the canadian university and Idon\'t have much relationship with someone who work with me.>> CorrectIf I don\'t have any relathionship with my superior people. then I hace to do entertain them for my promotion. >> If I don\'t have any connection with my superiors then I have to entertain them for my promotion.I hate to do this thing and I will achive my goal by myself.>> CorrectI will keep that in mind and I will be sustainable and agilant for all the things. >> Correct

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