My goal of Life

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I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

Ultimately, I want to be one of the memorable people who lived happy life oneself and made others happy.

>> Ultimately, I want to be one of the most memorable people who lived a happy life with ones self and made others happy.
To achieve this, I thought of some ways to do. 

>> To achieve this, I thought of some ways to do it. 

Most of all I want to be in good relationship with my friends and make new friends who are in different age, different field and so on. 

>> Most of all, I want to maintain a good relationship with my friends and I want to make new friends with a different age as me and has a different field and so on. 

I mean, various people. 

>> What I mean is that I want to meet various people. 

And then, I\'ll meet someone great and make a happy family. 

>> Then I\'ll meet someone great whom I can make a happy family with.

That\'s enough, but if i wish one more, I want to success in my work field and become rich person like Bill Gates or Steve Jobs so that I don\'t have to worry about any financial thing, and really focus on what I want to do.

>> That\'s all, but if I have one more wish, I want to be successful in my work field and become a rich person like Bill Gates or Steve Jobs, so that I don\'t have to worry about any financial problems and I can really focus on what I want to do.