My hair
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When I had a my little girl, I cut my hair up to my shoulders, because it was very hard to wash my hair when my belly got bigger.
Just after my little girl was born, I didn’t cut my hair to have long hair. So my hair grew up to my waist, and my hair had been long until I cut my hair up to my chest 5 weeks ago. I wanted to cut my hair just like 5 years ago, but I was too nervous to cut my hair that short.
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When I had a my little girl, I cut my hair up to my shoulders, because it was very hard to wash my hair when my belly got bigger.
>> Correct
Just after my little girl was born, I didn’t cut my hair to have long hair.
Just after my little girl was born, I didn’t cut my hair to have long hair.
>> Just after my little girl was born, I avoided cutting my hair to grow it out.
So my hair grew up to my waist, and my hair had been long until I cut my hair up to my chest 5 weeks ago.
>> So my hair grew to my waist, and it had stayed long until I cut it to my chest 5 weeks ago.
I wanted to cut my hair just like 5 years ago, but I was too nervous to cut my hair that short.
>> Correct
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