My hardship

2022-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Raven

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My hardship experience happened at home. That time my friend and I were supposed to go somewhere together on my mom\'s car that I needed to pick up my friend on my way to that place. But when I returned from academy my mom wasn\'t at home. So I tried to call my mom but my phone was not working. So I waited for my mom to come home nervously in my house because I ran out of time. However, I couldn\'t wait more that I went out to look for my mom. I thought that I should ask someone to use his phone to call my mom. Fortunately, when I went out to ask somebody for help, my mom\'s car came to a parking lot. I could go to my friend\'s house on time. It was so nervous that I couldn\'t forget about it. Whenever my friend and I talked about it, we feel released and breathed a sign of relief.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for taking the time to answer today\'s homework Rana! I appreciate it very much. Keep on doing your best in everything you do, in the future you will reap good fruit from your efforts. Good job Rana! :)

My hardship experience happened at home.
>> My hardest experience happened at home.
That time my friend and I were supposed to go somewhere together on my mom\'s car that I needed to pick up my friend on my way to that place.
>> That time, my friend and I were supposed to go somewhere together on my mom\'s car. We needed to pick up my friend on the way to the place.
But when I returned from academy my mom wasn\'t at home.
>> But when I returned from the academy, my mom wasn\'t at home.
So I tried to call my mom but my phone was not working.
>> Correct. OR I tried to call my mom but my phone was not working.
So I waited for my mom to come home nervously in my house because I ran out of time.
>> I waited for my mom to come home nervously, because I\'m afraid that I might ran out of time to pick my friend up.
However, I couldn\'t wait more that I went out to look for my mom.
>> However, I couldn\'t wait anymore, so I went outside to look for my mom.
I thought that I should ask someone to use his phone to call my mom.
>> Correct. OR I thought that I should ask someone to use their phone to call my mom.
Fortunately, when I went out to ask somebody for help, my mom\'s car came to a parking lot.
>> Fortunately, when I went out to ask somebody for help, I saw my mom\'s car in a parking lot.
I could go to my friend\'s house on time.
>> Correct.
It was so nervous that I couldn\'t forget about it.
>> I was so nervous that I couldn\'t forget about it.
Whenever my friend and I talked about it, we feel released and breathed a sign of relief.
>> Whenever my friend and I talked about it, we feel relieved and that I could now breathed a sigh of relief.

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