my holiday

2020-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I had holiday for 3 days. I used a float to fish. Do you know a float ? A float seems like ball or stick and floated on water. but If a fish bit bate.a float went under water. I told you not to like the fishing center.I was unluck. I caught two fish. but my wife caught six fish. That day .Whenever I didn`t see a my float, a fish bit my bate. or my fishing gut was cut. Next Day I went to wonju city.I had a time to check new apartment before living. I found many wrong. A construction firm will fix my list. My wife likes jewel. but she has bought little. I guess The reason is jewel is expensive. I am sad . If I had made earn much money she maybe bought much jewel. That day we went to department store and looked on jewel corner. but my wife wanted to go home. I guessed she thought jewel was expensive. so I was sad. My wife liked special ring at department store. so I bought that and I gave her that.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir John. Thank you for this. It\'s sweet and nice of you to know what your wife wants.

- T. Beth

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I had holiday for 3 days.

>>> I had a holiday for 3 days.
I used a float to fish.

>>> correct

Do you know a float ?

>>> Do you know what a float is?
A float seems like ball or stick and floated on water.

>>> A flat seems like a ball or stick and floats on water.
but If a fish bit bate.a float went under water.

>>> If a fish bites it, it sinks in the water.
I told you not to like the fishing center.I was unluck.

>>> I told you before that I didn\'t like te fishing center because I get unlucky there.
I caught two fish. but my wife caught six fish.

>>> I caught two fishes but my wife caught six.
That day .Whenever I didn`t see a my float, a fish bit my bate. or my fishing gut was cut.

>>> That day, whenever I didn`t see my float, it\'s either a fish bit my bate or my fishing gut was cut.

Next Day I went to wonju city.

>>> On the next day, I went to Wonju City.

I had a time to check new apartment before living. I found many wrong.

>>> I had time to check the new apartment before someone lives there. I found a lot of wrong things there.
A construction firm will fix my list.

>>> correct

My wife likes jewel. but she has bought little.

>>> My wife likes jewelries but she has bought only few of them.

I guess The reason is jewel is expensive.

>>> I guess the reason is because they are expensive.
I am sad .

>>> OR: It makes me sad.

If I had made earn much money she maybe bought much jewel.

>>> I only I earned more money, she may have bought a lot of jewelries.
That day we went to department store and looked on jewel corner. but my wife wanted to go home.

>>> That day, we went to department store and looked in the jewelry corner but my wife wanted to go home.

I guessed she thought jewel was expensive.

>>> I guessed she thought the jewelries were too expensive.
so I was sad.

>>> correct
My wife liked special ring at department store.

>>> My wife liked a special ring in the department store.

so I bought that and I gave her that.

>>> So, I bought that and gave it to her.

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