my home2
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Writing: Write an essay about where you live with these sentence patterns.
My place is situated in suji-gu, a very quiet place. And I’m living in the apartment.
The building was built in concrete. So, my apartment appearance looks normal
It\'s interior is very cozy. I mean fancy. Because my house was decorated 5years ago. And My mom decorated floor in black color. That’s why my house looks fancy
you know My room is in the end of my house. In honestly, I usually talk loudly with my friends, so my parents placed my room at the end of hallway. By the way my room has one bad and one computer. And I placed that stuff my way. its perfect!
강사 첨삭
Hello Robin!
You have many descriptions of your home and your room as well. You have to combine all of them to make a good answer to this question. Remember when you describe something, it should make the listener imagine what your house actually looks like just by listening to you. ^_^
~T. Maine
My place is situated in suji-gu, a very quiet place.
>>My place is situated in Suji-gu which is a very quiet place.
And I’m living in the apartment.
>>Correct.
The building was built in concrete.
The building was built in concrete.
>>Correct.
So, my apartment appearance looks normal
It\'s interior is very cozy.
>>So my apartment\'s appearance looks normal and it\'s interior is very cozy.
I mean fancy.
>>I mean it is fancy.
Because my house was decorated 5years ago.
>> It is because my house was decorated 5 years ago.
And My mom decorated floor in black color.
>>My mom decorated the floor with black color.
That’s why my house looks fancy
you know My room is in the end of my house.
you know My room is in the end of my house.
>>That\'s why my house looks fancy. My room is at the end of my house.
In honestly, I usually talk loudly with my friends, so my parents placed my room at the end of hallway.
>>Honestly, I usually talk loudly with my friends so my parents placed my room at the end of the hallway.
By the way my room has one bad and one computer.
>>By the way, my room has a bed and a computer.
And I placed that stuff my way.
>>I placed those stuff in my own way.
its perfect!
>>It looks perfect!
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