My hometown
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When I was 14, I moved in my hometown area.
Now I\'m 25. Since I was 14 to 25 so many thing changed in my hometown.
First, it built in very big shoppingmall.
Second, removed the mountain and built in the apartment that area.
Three, Made a subway station.
We can move freely everywhere and we can having fun shopping time.
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Hi Ann:)
Your hometown is the place which holds countless happy memories of your childhood and youth. At some point, many things will change. Some are good and some are bad.
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When I was 14, I moved in my hometown area.
>> When I was 14, I moved to my hometown.
Now I\'m 25.
>> Now, I\'m 25 yeas old.
Since I was 14 to 25 so many thing changed in my hometown.
>> Since I was a kid, many things have changed in my hometown.
First, it built in very big shoppingmall.
>> First, they built a very big shopping mall.
Second, removed the mountain and built in the apartment that area.
>> Second, they removed the mountain and built an apartment area.
Three, Made a subway station.
>> Three, they made a subway station.
We can move freely everywhere and we can having fun shopping time.
>> We can move freely everywhere and we can having fun shopping.
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