My hometown, Gwangju3
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Oh really? I guess I\'m talking to one of the future star of Korea, Ms. [이름]!
~Teacher Eve.
Second, many famous stars were born in Gwangju.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Secondly, many famous stars were born in Gwangju.
One of my favorite stars, Suzy who is a singer and an actress was born in my hometown.
>> Correct!
J-Hope who is a member of BTS said his hometown is Gwangju.
>> Correct!
Park Shin-hye(a popular actress), Yunho(a member of TVXQ), and Moon Geun-young(getting the best acting award when she was only 23) were born in Gwangju, too.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Park Shin-hye(a popular actress), Yunho(a member of TVXQ), and Moon Geun-young, who got the best acting award when she was only 23 was born in Gwangju, too.
Lastly, I would tell the history of Gwangju.
>> Correct!
In May 18, 1980, many citizens of Gwangju struggled against military dictatorship.
>> Correct!
Many people died because of the reason that they just argued democracy.
>> Many people died because of the reason that they just argued about democracy.
My father told me that his mother gave shelter to university students who was fighting for justice.
>> Correct!
Unfortunately, this movement was regarded as a riot for quite a long time.
>> Correct!
However, a few years ago, this movement was recognized as one of the most important movements in Korean history of democracy.
>> Correct!
We call it Gwangju Democratization Movement.
>> Correct!
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