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2022-05-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think they are spending a worse childhood than mine because they are already contacted on many kinds of SNS such as Youtube which makes them guineas or fools. It can be a harmful condition for kids.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Yes, kids are very exposed to those already nowadays.

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I think they are spending a worse childhood than mine because they are already contacted on many kinds of SNS such as Youtube which makes them guineas or fools.

>> I think their childhoods are worse than mine because they are exposed to many kinds of SNS such as YouTube, which makes them either geniuses or fools.

It can be a harmful condition for kids.

>> It can be harmful for kids.

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