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2022-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I am afraid of the pulmonary fibrosis that hardens our lungs and not being able to get a breath. And I chose this because my older sister has been in the hospital for a long time.

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Hi [이름]!  

That\'s horrible. I hope that you don\'t get that disease. :( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I am afraid of the pulmonary fibrosis that hardens our lungs and not being able to get a breath.
>> I am afraid of the pulmonary fibrosis that hardens our lungs and not let humans breathe. 

And I chose this because my older sister has been in the hospital for a long time.
>>  I chose this because my older sister had it and was at the hospital for a long time. 

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