My homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I think such an idea would have more disadvantages than benefits. I think that most of the food is produced and sold a lot of it, but not buying a lot of it means that the people of the country don\'t even have food to eat. So, it is the wrong way and we cannot survive in a globalized world in that way.
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I think such an idea would have more disadvantages than benefits.
>>> I think such idea would have more disadvantages than benefits.
I think that most of the food is produced and sold a lot of it, but not buying a lot of it means that the people of the country don\'t even have food to eat.
>>> I think a lot of food is produced and sold, but many people in the country still don’t have enough to eat.
So, it is the wrong way and we cannot survive in a globalized world in that way.
>>> This approach is unsustainable, and we can\'t thrive in a globalized world with such practices.
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