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2024-10-04 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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*********************** HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: ESSAY: Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be beneficial to society. Others say the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion Education is good method for personal ambitions. It needs more information to success, and more information needs studing. But on the other hand, it is good element of development beneficial to society. There are all right answer, anybody don\'t say that other opinion are wrong. But, I think education is stronger society side. If there is only personal ambition, many nations waste a lot of time and money. The reason that they do compulsory education is that it helps the development of the country.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Lee~! ^^ Great job! Your essay clearly shows your understanding of the dispute and its key issues, and you explained everything in an easy-to-follow manner.

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Education is good method for personal ambitions.

>>> Education is a valuable tool for achieving personal goals.

It needs more information to success, and more information needs studying.

>>> It requires knowledge to succeed, and to acquire knowledge, studying is necessary.  

But on the other hand, it is good element of development beneficial to society.

>>> On the other hand, education is a key factor in societal development and benefits everyone.
There are all right answer, anybody don\'t say that other opinion are wrong. 

>>> All opinions are valid; no one is saying that other viewpoints are wrong.

But, I think education is stronger society side.

>>> However, I believe education is a key strength for society.

If there is only personal ambition, many nations waste a lot of time and money.

>>> If people focus solely on personal ambition, many nations end up wasting time and money.

The reason that they do compulsory education is that it helps the development of the country.

>>> Compulsory education helps with the country\'s development. 

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