My homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be beneficial to society. Others say the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The goal of education is to develop society. In order for society to develop, education is necessary. However, education is not only for social development. Education is also necessary for one\'s own development and ambition.
Which one is right depends on one\'s thinking, but at least I think the goal of education lies in the development of society.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Lee! I missed you in class today. I hope you\'re in a good condition. By the way, I can\'t be with you on Friday because I will be traveling. See you next week! Have a good time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The goal of education is to develop society.
>>> The goal of education is to foster societal development.
In order for society to develop, education is necessary.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> For society to progress, education is essential.
However, education is not only for social development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Education is also necessary for one\'s own development and ambition.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Which one is right depends on one\'s thinking, but at least I think the goal of education lies in the development of society.
>>> The perspective on this may vary, but I believe that the primary goal of education is to promote societal development.
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