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2025-04-04 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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>> How does delicious food affect our mood? Well, this question quietly simple or difficult. I think that answer separate between scientific section and literary section. but the scientific answer is more correct than literary one. Some people who learn science, say that serise of process comes by my brain and tongue. when we eat some food, our cell in the tongue (taste cell) send electrical sign to brain. And then electrical sign make brain cell shocking statement. Shocked brain creates more hormones, we feel better.

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Hello, Alex!~
I appreciate how you explained your answer. It looks interesting to read more of your compositions!~
Chammy
Well, this question quietly simple or difficult.
>> Well, this question is either simple or difficult.
I think that answer separate between scientific section and literary section. but the scientific answer is more correct than literary one.
>> I think that the answer is separate between the scientific section and the literary section, but the scientific answer is more correct than the other.
Some people who learn science, say that serise of process comes by my brain and tongue.
>> Some people who learn science say that the series of processes comes from my brain and tongue.
when we eat some food, our cell in the tongue (taste cell) send electrical sign to brain. 
>> When we eat some food our cells in the tongue (taste cell) send electrical signals to the brain. 
And then electrical sign make brain cell shocking statement. Shocked brain creates more hormones, we feel better.
>>And then the electrical signal makes the brain cells a shocking statement. 
Shocked brain creates more hormones, we feel better.
>> A shocked brain creates more hormones, and we feel better.

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