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2025-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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To be honest, I think this is one of the very difficult questions. The main opinion of a person who owns a gun is in \'self-defense\'. I agree with that. Owning a gun can stop the other person from attacking you. Also, you should be careful to act because you feel that someone else will own a gun. A lot has happened in Korea recently. There were many cases of using a knife and causing damage to many people. We think that it is the absence of self-defense. If there was a gun, it would be significantly reduced. Of course, I can\'t help but think about the damage. I don\'t ignore it. I rather respect it. It\'s a worry worth considering, and I don\'t have a good alternative to it either. An alternative that comes to mind is to increase the power of the police, public officials, and public authorities, but since Korea is a country that has experienced dictatorship, that would be difficult.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Alex!
I appreciate you sharing your opinion on this. Thank you for writing the composition.
Chammy
To be honest, I think this is one of the very difficult questions.
Or
>> I find this question challenging to answer.
The main opinion of a person who owns a gun is in \'self-defense\'. I agree with that.
>> The main opinion of a person who owns a gun is for self-defense, and I agree with that.
OR
>> I agree with the majority opinion that the possession of a gun is for self-defense.
 Owning a gun can stop the other person from attacking you.
>>Correct
Also, you should be careful to act because you feel that someone else will own a gun.
>> Also, you should be careful of your actions when you know that someone owns a gun.
 A lot has happened in Korea recently.
OR
>> There are a lot of cases in Korea.
 There were many cases of using a knife and causing damage to many people.
>>Correct
 We think that it is the absence of self-defense. 
>>Correct
If there was a gun, it would be significantly reduced.
>> If there were a gun, it would be significantly reduced.
Of course, I can\'t help but think about the damage.
>>Correct
 I don\'t ignore it. I rather respect it. 
>>  I don\'t ignore it. I would rather respect it. 
It\'s a worry worth considering, and I don\'t have a good alternative to it either. 
>> Correct
An alternative that comes to mind is to increase the power of the police, public officials, and public authorities, but since Korea is a country that has experienced dictatorship, that would be difficult.
OR
>> An alternative is to strengthen the police, public officials, and public authority, although this would be difficult given Korea\'s history of dictatorship.

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