my homework

2025-08-11 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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HOMEWORK: How are you going to describe yourself as a man? If you ask me to explain why I\'m a man, there\'s a lot I can explain. I have a male gender scientifically and I have a lot of physically masculine characteristics. I have what women don\'t have and I don\'t have what women have. I can also prove myself a man in psychological terms. I have a strong masculinity, I like being active, and I also like reason. I might think that what I am saying is a prejudice. However, I think this has been a good reference point for gender distinction from the past to the present, and from this standard, I can say that I am a man.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Alex! 
I appreciate your written composition. I hope you also described yourself as a man, sharing your personality and the traits you have, as well as the ones you want to develop.
Chammy
If you ask me to explain why I\'m a man, there\'s a lot I can explain. 
>> Correct
I have a male gender scientifically, and I have a lot of physically masculine characteristics. 
>> Scientifically, I am male, and I have many physically masculine characteristics.
I have what women don\'t have, and I don\'t have what women have.
>> Correct
I can also prove myself a man in psychological terms. 
>> I can also prove that I am a man in psychological terms. 
I have a strong masculinity, I like being active, and I also like reason.
>> I have strong masculinity; I like being active, and I value reason.
I might think that what I am saying is a prejudice. 
>> I might think that what I am saying is prejudiced. 
OR
>> I realize that what I am saying might sound prejudiced
However, I think this has been a good reference point for gender distinction from the past to the present, and from this standard, I can say that I am a man.
OR
>> However, I believe this has been a useful reference point for distinguishing gender throughout history, and based on this standard, I can say that I am a man.

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