my homework
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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Advances in science have brought many consequences to mankind. Among them, I can be confident that the extension of lifespan is one of the most valuable outcomes.
When the lifespan is extended, the good points are immediately revealed. We can see our advanced science and technology and the development of civilization.
However, it is not necessarily the only good thing. Its development leads to the development of diseases, and it also leads to the battle of unknown pain and suffering.
I feel the same way. There are not necessarily good things about extending life. Because there is also rest and peace that can be gained by death.
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Good morning Lee! How was your birthday celebration? I hope you had a great time? What about the license you wished to receive, did you get it? I really hope so. Anyway, let\'s talk about it later. Thanks for your essay again, I\'m grateful to see you do your best in everything. Keep on!
When the lifespan is extended, the good points are immediately revealed.
However, it is not necessarily the only good thing.
I feel the same way.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Advances in science have brought many consequences to mankind.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Among them, I can be confident that the extension of lifespan is one of the most valuable outcomes.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
When the lifespan is extended, the good points are immediately revealed.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
We can see our advanced science and technology and the development of civilization.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, it is not necessarily the only good thing.
>>>However, it does not necessarily mean that we can only experience good things.
Its development leads to the development of diseases, and it also leads to the battle of unknown pain and suffering.
>>>Its development can also contribute to the emergence of diseases, as well as the struggle with unknown pain and suffering.
I feel the same way.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
There are not necessarily good things about extending life. Because there is also rest and peace that can be gained by death.
>>> Extending life is not necessarily always beneficial, as death can also offer rest and peace.
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