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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Many people think that students should wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I think uniforms are necessary. However, the uniforms that are too bad are wrong.
Uniforms are significant in narrowing the gap between the rich and the poor and showing equality among students. However, it is wrong to spend a lot of money to buy uniforms.
Also, school uniforms should be made of airy, soft materials for students\' convenience.
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Uniforms are significant in narrowing the gap between the rich and the poor and showing equality among students.
Also, school uniforms should be made of airy, soft materials for students\' convenience.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think uniforms are necessary.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, the uniforms that are too bad are wrong.
>>> However, uncomfortable uniforms are not acceptable.
Uniforms are significant in narrowing the gap between the rich and the poor and showing equality among students.
OR>>> School uniforms play an important role in reducing the gap between rich and poor students and promoting equality among them.
However, it is wrong to spend a lot of money to buy uniforms.
OR>>>> However, it is unreasonable to spend a large amount of money on school uniforms.
Also, school uniforms should be made of airy, soft materials for students\' convenience.
>>> In addition, school uniforms should be made from lightweight, breathable, and soft materials for students’ comfort.
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