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ESSAY: Cash is being replaced by digital payment methods in many countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
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Internet payments with our cards and smartphones have many benefits. We don\'t need to carry heavy coins or bills anymore. We just need to read barcodes or take our smartphones to the payment device. Also, there is no capacity limit.
However, there are also disadvantages, such as being vulnerable to hacking attacks and being unable to do anything without a smartphone.
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However, there are also disadvantages, such as being vulnerable to hacking attacks and being unable to do anything without a smartphone.
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Internet payments with our cards and smartphones have many benefits.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Internet payments using cards and smartphones offer many advantages.
We don\'t need to carry heavy coins or bills anymore.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
We just need to read barcodes or take our smartphones to the payment device.
>>> Payments can be completed quickly by scanning barcodes or tapping a smartphone on a payment terminal.
Also, there is no capacity limit.
>>> In addition, there is usually no strict limit on the amount of cashless transactions.
However, there are also disadvantages, such as being vulnerable to hacking attacks and being unable to do anything without a smartphone.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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