My homework

2026-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY ESSAY: Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language in primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? I think the drawbacks are greater. We grow up learning our mother tongue. Through it, we develop the horse’s ability to speak and, furthermore, to think. However, if you learn another language while learning your mother tongue, you cannot develop the way of thinking, and you cannot develop our language either. I think learning another language has major drawbacks.

강사 첨삭

Hi Lee! Thank you for making another effort to complete your homework. I truly appreciate your dedication and willingness to improve your English skills. Keep practicing consistently and continue doing your best to achieve greater fluency and confidence in using the English language. Enjoy your English learning journey!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think the drawbacks are greater.

>>> I believe the drawbacks are greater than the benefits.

We grow up learning our mother tongue.Through it, we develop the horse’s ability to speak and, furthermore, to think.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> Children naturally grow up learning their mother tongue, which helps them develop not only their language skills but also their ability to think and communicate effectively.

However, if you learn another language while learning your mother tongue, you cannot develop the way of thinking, and you cannot develop our language either.

>>> However, if they are required to learn another language at the same time, they may become confused and may not develop a strong foundation in their native language.

I think learning another language has major drawbacks.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> As a result, their overall language development could be affected.

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