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Do you agree of making alcohol illegal to make the world a safer place? I agree that making alcohol ilegal helps to make the world a safer place. I have some reasons for that. First,high doses of alcohol seriously affect judgment.Drinkers may have slurred speech, confusion, depression, short-term memory loss. Especially, teenager who don' have sufficient control power may addict to alcohol and suffer from the addicition. And definitely this will keep them from bieng a normal life. Second, alcohol isn't a panacea. Some people say thant when they're depressed, alcohol gives them a pleasure and happiness. They think that alcohol will help them escape their problems. However,the truth is, it doen't solve problems:they simply hide feelings and problems. When it wears off, the feelings and problems remain, or become worse. Drugs can ruin every aspect of a person's life. Thus, we have to prohibit drinking alcohol because it cause high addiction and give people a false consultation.

Hi! Thank you for doing your homework. You did such a good composition today. You used complex sentences with amazing words! Wow! Keep up the good work! I made some corrections here,try to analyze what you can get from it. Have a good day and a good night! T.Aurora Do you agree of making alcohol illegal to make the world a safer place? >>Correct!I agree that making alcohol ilegal helps to make the world a safer place. >>Correct! ( Be careful with the spelling of the word \" illegal\")I have some reasons for that. >>Correct! First,high doses of alcohol seriously affect judgment. >>Correct! Drinkers may have slurred speech, confusion, depression, short-term memory loss. >>Correct!  Especially, teenager who don\' have sufficient control power may addict to alcohol and suffer from the addicition. >>Correct! Or: Especially, teenagers who don\'t have sufficient control power may depend to alcohol and suffer from addiction.  And definitely this will keep them from bieng a normal life. >>And definitely this will keep them from having a normal life.  Second, alcohol isn\'t a panacea. >>Correct!  Some people say thant when they\'re depressed, alcohol gives them a pleasure and happiness. >>Correct! ( Be careful with your spelling \"that\").  They think that alcohol will help them escape their problems. >>Correct! Or: They think that alcohol can help them avoid their problems.  However,the truth is, it doen\'t solve problems: >>Correct! (Be careful with the word \"doesn\'t\"). they simply hide feelings and problems. >>Correct! When it wears off, the feelings and problems remain, or become worse. >>Correct!   Drugs can ruin every aspect of a person\'s life. >>Correct!   Thus, we have to prohibit drinking alcohol because it cause high addiction and give people a false consultation. >>Correct!  Or:Thus, we have to prohibit drinking alcohol because it causes high addiction and it gives people a false consultation.