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Should children provide room and take for their aging parents or should they send them to home for the aged? I think that children should provide their parents with room and take care of them instead of sending them to the facility. I have some reasons for that. First, we should pay respect to our parents as their child. Our parents have sacrificed their whole life maintaing houses. Thus, we have to give them hand and make compensation for the efforts they were williing to give us. Second,taking care of our parent in our own home is safer and cozier than those silver facilities. I heard that sometimes there are violece frome the people who are entitled care them. So I think it's better bieng with our parents when they get old and sick. Third, living with granparents is a good examplary for kids. Naturally we can accept an learn the manners which are required to respect elderly people and also children can feel a solid sense of beloning. For those reasons,

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