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2013-03-01 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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One of the most regrettable dilemas I have ever experienced My most regrettable dilema was when I was 7 years old. I knew a boy who was older than me, around 14 years old. I don't remember his name now but he was notorious for being mean and bullying other friends in our town. One day, I saw that my brother(he was 10years old back then) was caught by him and bullied by him. He knew that I was seeing them. He told me not to tell anybody and if I don't, I will be bullied by him. I was so scared that I was about cry. Well, this exprience was so traumatic that I still remember that moment. If it i for the sake of my own brother, I should tell someone to help. If I only think my good, I shouldn't tell anybody. However, I told my parents what was happend and they visited his house and he was punished by his parents serverly. jaja...

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Hi there!!! You did a great job in sharing your most regrettable dilema. It\'s a good thing that you told your parents about it. And that shows that you care about your brother and that you\'re not just thinking for your own sake. Great job and I hope you\'ll keep up the great job! Have a great evening and a wonderful weekend ahead! Teacher Aurora ^_^   One of the most regrettable dilemas I have ever experienced My most regrettable dilema was when I was 7 years old. >>CORRECT! I knew a boy who was older than me, around 14 years old. >>CORRECT! I don\'t remember his name now but he was notorious for being mean and bullying other friends in our town. >>I don\'t remember his name now, but he was notorious for being mean and for bullying some of my friends in our town. One day, I saw that my brother(he was 10years old back then) was caught by him and bullied by him. >>CORRECT! He knew that I was seeing them. >>He knew that I was looking at them. He told me not to tell anybody and if I don\'t, I will be bullied by him. >>He told me not to tell anybody. And if I did, he will bully me. I was so scared that I was about cry. >>I was so scared that I was on the verge of crying. >>I was so scared that I started crying. Well, this exprience was so traumatic that I still remember that moment. >>Well, that experience was so traumatic that I still remember it until now. If it i for the sake of my own brother, I should tell someone to help. >>I felt that for the sake of my own brother, I should ask someone for help. If I only think my good, I shouldn\'t tell anybody. >>If I was just thinking for my own good, I shouldn\'t tell anybody. However, I told my parents what was happend and they visited his house and he was punished by his parents serverly. jaja... >>However, I told my parents about it and they visited his house. Then he was punished by his parents. jaja...

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